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Post by Nate on Jan 30, 2012 12:18:23 GMT -5
I wrote this about nine years ago for a creative writing class. It was a writing exercise. We had to write a story under two pages in less than ten minutes. This is what I came up with. Attachments:
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Post by shelby on Jan 31, 2012 10:32:01 GMT -5
I really like this, Nate. Pretty good for under ten minutes. I'd like to try that. My favourite line, "...more importantly some of his homemade cigarettes." Well, I guess drugs whatever they may be are more important than letters from a significant other. LOL. The post came around again for the second time; Tom prayed fervently for sustinence. His eyes pleading, Tom held out his hand for a package, an envelope, anything that might give him will, give him feeling. The man held out an envelope; Tom snatched it and waited for the postman to past. The sarcastic, cynical glare and swaying of the head from the postman didn't affect Tom whatsoever. He had it. With a careful precision, Tom opened the envelope expecting euphoria to pour from its contents. Tom felt his bowels twist when he saw that it was nothing but a perfumed letter filled with honeyed words.
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Post by anne on Feb 2, 2012 18:30:31 GMT -5
Nice piece, Nate. Glad I got to read something from you. I feel bad for his buddy, though. I like how he gave him a cigarette. There were a few instances of missing words (like the etc.), but considering you wrote it in 10 min, it makes sense and flows well with clear transitions. shelby, I thought that was the funniest line as well.
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Post by Nate on Feb 3, 2012 14:43:39 GMT -5
Thanks, I'll check about the missing words. I did edit it a few times and caught some of that, but I guess I still missed some! I'll get some more stuff up soon.
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